E-commerce Electronic commerce (referred to as e-commerce) is to buy goods as customers and sell the products as vendors through Internet or other computer networks. Because of advance of the technology and convenience of launching it, (a lower risk and lower cost business) this business model is becoming popular nowadays and many people tend to participate in this activity. But there are also many disadvantage of e-commerce. The first is fraud. Comparing to offline store, customers tend to be reluctant to buy something because they are not sure that is reliable or secure. In other words, while paying for something, customers need to give their details (name, bank card number, etc). They are worried about if this information is leaked into wrong hands. So the e-commerce vendor must also perform to be truthful about its product and its availability, shipping reliably, and handling complaints promptly and effectively.
E- commerce is very convenience item for purchase. We can save time and money. We don't have to spend a long time for shop and it's more cheaper than any other shop. Because of many advantage,it is getting popular for business model. However, there are many disadvantages go with advantage. One of the example is a discharge of personal information. If we solve some problem, this mehod will be a perfect item for business model.
Go Un: This is three times the word count and defeats the purpose of this exercise as an opportunity to improve concise language usage.
"But there are . . . " - There, however, are . . .
"worried about if" - double preposition not needed
"is leaked" - passive not needed
Don't start sentences with So when writing. It's too talky.
"perform to be truthful" - ? be truthful ?
The last sentence is very awkward. Instead: E-commerce vendors must also be truthful about its product, availability, ship reliably, and handle complaints promptly as well as effectively.
Ji-Hye: Using third person plural makes this too informal.
Watch your noun & adjective forms (convenience - convenient).
E-commerce is not an item for purchase; it is a business model.
Watch your infinitives (for shop - to shop; go - to go ).
Double comparative (more cheaper).
any other type of shopping.
Watch your plural forms - advantages, examples, problems
What do you mean by discharge?
Please write in MS Word first and do a spelling/grammar check. The plurals, comparatives and infinitive mistakes would have been caught and correctable by you before you posted.
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E-commerce
Electronic commerce (referred to as e-commerce) is to buy goods as customers and sell the products as vendors through Internet or other computer networks. Because of advance of the technology and convenience of launching it, (a lower risk and lower cost business) this business model is becoming popular nowadays and many people tend to participate in this activity. But there are also many disadvantage of e-commerce. The first is fraud. Comparing to offline store, customers tend to be reluctant to buy something because they are not sure that is reliable or secure. In other words, while paying for something, customers need to give their details (name, bank card number, etc). They are worried about if this information is leaked into wrong hands. So the e-commerce vendor must also perform to be truthful about its product and its availability, shipping reliably, and handling complaints promptly and effectively.
E- commerce is very convenience item for purchase. We can save time and money. We don't have to spend a long time for shop and it's more cheaper than any other shop. Because of many advantage,it is getting popular for business model. However, there are many disadvantages go with advantage. One of the example is a discharge of personal information. If we solve some problem, this mehod will be a perfect item for business model.
Go Un:
This is three times the word count and defeats the purpose of this exercise as an opportunity to improve concise language usage.
"But there are . . . " - There, however, are . . .
"worried about if" - double preposition not needed
"is leaked" - passive not needed
Don't start sentences with So when writing. It's too talky.
"perform to be truthful" - ? be truthful ?
The last sentence is very awkward.
Instead:
E-commerce vendors must also be truthful about its product, availability, ship reliably, and handle complaints promptly as well as effectively.
Ji-Hye:
Using third person plural makes this too informal.
Watch your noun & adjective forms
(convenience - convenient).
E-commerce is not an item for purchase; it is a business model.
Watch your infinitives (for shop - to shop; go - to go ).
Double comparative (more cheaper).
any other type of shopping.
Watch your plural forms - advantages, examples, problems
What do you mean by discharge?
Please write in MS Word first and do a spelling/grammar check. The plurals, comparatives and infinitive mistakes would have been caught and correctable by you before you posted.
Maria
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