This article mainly quoted and focused on Jed Emerson's claim that business enterprises can get more 'substantial' profit by performing social return programs and it also must be done. Emerson believes such system called 'non-profit business' will soon emerge as a new and lucrative business model and also beneficially militate to both the pro-business and its constituents.
In this article Jed Emerson’s opinion over business’s blending value. The most important point is that for-profit or non-profit is depend on organizations. Though businesses itself is established to profit if the company is based on social and not financial return that is no matter.
JiGun: What do you mean by "militate?" Watch your writing for missing articles. In the first sentence is would change it to ". . . and also that it must be done." Do you understand why I would make that change?
As for content, you outline the basics, but didn't explain why or how Emerson believes what he does.
Hwa-Jeong: This entry is very confusing to me. It is so general and the subject verb agreement mistakes make it very difficult to understand your meaning.
Watch your sentence fragments (Is there a subject and verb for every sentence?), passive voice, reflexive pronouns, and complex sentence forms.
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This article mainly quoted and focused on Jed Emerson's claim that business enterprises can get more 'substantial' profit by performing social return programs and it also must be done. Emerson believes such system called 'non-profit business' will soon emerge as a new and lucrative business model and also beneficially militate to both the pro-business and its constituents.
In this article Jed Emerson’s opinion over business’s blending value. The most important point is that for-profit or non-profit is depend on organizations. Though businesses itself is established to profit if the company is based on social and not financial return that is no matter.
JiGun:
What do you mean by "militate?" Watch your writing for missing articles. In the first sentence is would change it to ". . . and also that it must be done." Do you understand why I would make that change?
As for content, you outline the basics, but didn't explain why or how Emerson believes what he does.
Hwa-Jeong:
This entry is very confusing to me. It is so general and the subject verb agreement mistakes make it very difficult to understand your meaning.
Watch your sentence fragments (Is there a subject and verb for every sentence?), passive voice, reflexive pronouns, and complex sentence forms.
Maria
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